User:Zenobia2021/Barbara Wylie/The Wicked Witch Of The North Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Zenobia2021

Lead:
"Does the Lead include a brief description of the article's major sections?"

I noticed that your lead doesn't make mention of the Canada Tour of 1912.

Bibliography:
One thing that I also noticed is that is that you don’t have anything in your bibliography section. Under the name of your article in the course dashboard there should be four links: “Bibliography,” “Sandbox Draft,” “Peer Review,” and “Article.” From what I understand, we are supposed to put our sources into the “Bibliography” section too.

References:
As for your references I have included a post by our professor from the “Forum for Questions, Comments, Corrections, etc of General Concern” under the title “Citations on Wikipedia”:   The link (or where you accessed it) won't help for a general global encyclopedia at all. What you need to tell people is the full bibliographic information as described in my previous response - that is how they can find the item themselves, no matter who or where they are. So for a journal article (the only things accessed through JStor are articles in scholarly journals) the full bibliographic reference is:


 * name of author(s)
 * title of article
 * title of journal
 * issue number of journal
 * year of publication
 * page numbers of article

recently published items or items that have been digitized also often have a DOI number and you can include that too, but just note that the vast majority of things that have been published AND WHICH STILL CONTAIN EXTREMELY VALUABLE INFORMATION AND PERSPECTIVES are not available electronically, and can only be found using citations that point to printed materials. Commonly what I have seen on other Wikipedia pages are links in the references that when clicked on take you to the bibliography of that source.

Content:
The following quotes are from your article that I find a bit confusing or problematic:

“Barbara was apart of the Glasgow branch which was formed March 1906 and joined in 1909 by 1910 was assigned as organizer.”

I found this portion slightly confusing. I would recommend giving it a second look and perhaps making some adjustments.

“and according to Wylie, if all else fails to instill militant action in order to make change happen[8].”

This seems like an area where it would be appropriate to use quotation marks to quote what sounds like an important or popular statement made by Wylie. Additionally, what I have gathered from looking at other Wikipedia articles is that the citation goes after the period.

“Wylie's tour started in Quebec on Nov 4th 1912 she was in Montreal giving a speech.”

Again, this is slightly confusing.

I think you did a fantastic job creating this article!