User:Zfajri/Effects of climate change on oceans/Joh19094 Peer Review

General info
Zfajri
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Zfajri/Effects of climate change on oceans
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Effects of climate change on oceans

Evaluate the drafted changes
First of all I realize this peer review is coming way later than it should have. I've been way behind on my peer reviews so obviously do with this feedback what you wish or nothing at all.

I'm assuming that this draft is meant to be a new and improved Lead section due to the fact that it's kind of an overview and summary. I make this assumption because the current article goes more in depth to each of these issues that you outline and has its own section for each. As a Lead section, it has a good introductory sentence and does a good job outlining what the rest of the article is going to talk about. That being said, some of the statistics/hard facts you get into are too specific for an introductory paragraph and sometimes are not consistent with (or included at all) in the actual sections themselves later on.

The content is pretty solid. Added information is up to date and consistent with the topic. I would recommend adding links to relevant Wikipedia pages when you list things like "global climate change" or "Coccolithophores" or "plankton" or "ocean acidification."

The tone seems pretty balanced and unbiased towards a specific viewpoint. The use of "our" as a first person pronoun isn't usually appropriate for Wikipedia.

Your bibliography is solid and the sources match the claims for which they are linked. Make sure to check the formatting requirements for both the References section and the in-text citation for each source (each number-link at the end of a claim should be entered through the citation feature so that it becomes superscript).

Organization could be improved. If this is indeed a Lead section, I wouldn't give it a header. If it's a body paragraph, I would recommend leaving out the header "Three Main Effects" and instead breaking it down with subheaders, one for each of the three main effects. Or, you could list them in a numbered list to make each effect stand out more and look cleaner. There are a couple spelling and grammar errors, so try copying and pasting this into a word processing application like Word and following spelling and grammar suggestions. Also see if you can find a way to make the numbers in chemical compound names into superscripts.