User:Zha Zha La/Donna Auston/Elisehogan1 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Zha Zha La


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Zha%20Zha%20La/Donna_Auston?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
- I really like the tone throughout this draft it sounds very similar to other wikipedia articles I've read.

- I think it would be nice to include more specifics throughout this article (but I know this is just a first draft!) For example, I think you could elaborate on this sentence and sentences like this "She has written several articles and book chapters on these topics." by including names and links to articles she's written or books she's published. I also noticed some grammar tense issues when talking about things she worked on in the past.

- I like the structure that you have at the moment even though it's not fully complete. I think the order you chose for the information is intuitive and will be great when you fill it out in more detail. I do wonder if you could put Activism under Career instead of at the end but otherwise I like the structure. I also wonder if you should use summaries of her work that you've found in reliable articles instead of summarizing the pieces yourselves because that may leave room for your personal biases.