User:Zha Zha La/John L. Jackson Jr./MinaE123 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Zha Zha La, Achebbi, Janice.christell


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * John L. Jackson Jr.


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Overall, the draft of the article seems to have a solid foundation. It is now a matter of incorporating more details as you continue to explore your sources. In terms of the lead, I think it will require an update to reflect the details and content that will be put in later. As it is right now, it is concise and has a direct and succinct opening sentence. The content needs to be built up further but is good for a first draft. The list of works is comprehensive. I would also advise writing a little more about each major publication (i.e., what it about, what is its message) which looking at other good Wiki pages, tends to be a common element. So far, the tone is neutral and balanced. The organization seems to be good looking at the sections outlined. Sources and references seem to meet expectations and I could not spot any repeated source cited multiple times, which is good! Overall, solid first draft. I think it is just a matter of filling in the gaps with more details based on the outline you currently have.