User:Zha Zha La/John L. Jackson Jr./Rscaggs02 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Zha Zha La


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Zha%20Zha%20La/John_L._Jackson_Jr.?preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/John_L._Jackson_Jr.

Evaluate the drafted changes
Introduction:

- There needs to be space between "Dr." and "Jackson"

- Last sentence about Jackson's documentary might need to be rewritten. Is Novus Ordo Seclorum his film? If so, maybe just say: "he is working on a documentary film about conspiracy theories in urban America titled Novus Ordo Seclorum and a short video exploring how African Americans use the Bible in their everyday lives.

Educator:

- Wording is a bit unclear: maybe state something like "John L. Jackson Jr. is the first professor of Communication and Anthropology at Richard Perry University as well as a dean and professor of Africana Studies at the Pennsylvania Annenberg School for Communication"

- There might be some pronouns that are capitalized when they shouldn't be:

- "Dean of the School of Social Policy..." --> "dean of the School of Social Policy" ?

- "Special Adviser to the Provost on Diversity" --> "special adviser to the Provost on Diversity" ?

- ".... Assistant professor" --> "assistant professor" ?

Selected publications:

Minor spacing issues (probably just glitches from the copy paste?)

Example: "Ethnography Is, EthnographyAin’t" (there is no space between Ethnography and Ain't)