User:Zieg5065/Jon Schwabish/Sydniegjerald Peer Review

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Zieg5065


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Prof said we should actually make some edits, so I made a few. I added a few links and extended the name of Georgetown to Georgetown University, reworded a sentence and changed what looked like a typo. I think you have a really good structure here and have a lot of good information to work with. I think the article is suffering from a lack of citations and links though. All of the information about him needs to be linked to where you found it as well as all of his notable works, and I linked the two colleges he teaches at for an example of key words to link to an existing page. In 'Life and Education,' the first sentence is missing where he was born. There are a few other sentences with areas that could use wording or revisions, but overall a really nice start!