User:Zimmerr35/Sport Psychology/Jackducas Peer Review

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Hello, Jack! :)

First of all, thanks for choosing an excellent topic. I know nothing about sports psychology, so thank you for enlightening me on this topic. Overall, from what you have down here so far, I think it is excellent. You clearly inform your fellow students with what your lead is about--you are expanding on a previously written Wikipedia article. Additionally, you have made it clear what section of this article you will be expanding on—which is “reduced athletic performance.” This makes it clear to your fellow students the changes that will be made to this section, thanks!

Along this, you have made an excellent choice by choosing to cite your updated information with scholarly journals. This is important since reputable sources are vital for Wikipedia articles—especially since you are centering your topic on something that is health/psychology related. Due to this, I would say your article is balanced and not biased; you are not sourcing from biased sources, such as blogs. While there are certainly objectional blogs out there, most are opinionated, which can result in a biased outlook. Additionally, your article is also up-to-date due to the scholarly journal you want to use; well-done!

From what I have read of your section, nothing appears biased. It is clear, concise, and easy to read! I didn’t notice any grammatical or spelling errors either; good job! There are no content gaps that I can see…Moreover, your presented information is also very engaging and informative. It has a professional tone but it’s easy to read! I need to keep this in mind for my article on Rabbiting…I think it might be too formal in tone, and therefore kinda boring. I cannot really think of any ways for your article to be improved, other than (if applicable) adding a picture? Maybe this could be a medical graph that represents the performance decline of athletes (if such a graph exists?) For instance, maybe this can be a bar graph of some sorts or a line chart? Also, you might want to use a few more scholarly sources to back up your information! 😊 I am sure you already know this (and have planned on doing it), but the more the better. :D This way, readers will know for certain that your presented information is indisputable and quite reputable. Other than that, what you have here is excellent and a fantastic start to a phenomenally written article; keep up the great work!