User:ZionMoore/Carmen Maria Machado/Gabyhanze Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

ZionMoore


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:ZionMoore/Carmen_Maria_Machado


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Carmen Maria Machado

Evaluate the drafted changes
So far, I think you are on a good track with your draft. A strength of the draft is that you have a lot of sources that express Machado’s personal views and experiences as a person and a writer. I think you have taken advantage of the fact that Machado is a current contemporary writer right now and have found articles that showcase that perspective. Right now, I think what you still need more of is biographical information about her. I’m sure you are already planning to put more of that, but I just thought I would point that out.

As far as sources, I understand that Machado’s work is much more current, but if you can find any literary scholarship about her memoir or short story collection (if there is any) I think that could be valuable.

Looking at the formatting, I would look at maybe tweaking the headings a bit. I think “Writings and Writing Styles” and “Personal Views” are meant to be subheadings under the “Personal” heading, but they are currently formatted as headings (there is a way to list them as subheadings if that is the intent). I would also suggest that there be a section for “Published Works” and discuss her literary work, descriptions, and the topics they cover. You might have been planning to put that information under “Writing and Writing Styles,” but I’m not sure. I think you could also incorporate information about her writing style as well as personal views and perspectives under “Published Works” as well (maybe as subheadings) because then you could talk about how it has influenced her work. I think it would also be great if you could talk about the intersections in her identity and how that influences her writing as well. Ultimately, how you organize the article is up to you but these are just suggestions to get you thinking.

Also, in “Early Life” I think you can shorten the information about how much she loves beauty and fashion a little bit. I don’t think you need to write that much about it, although that is also just a suggestion.

The last point is just a technical one which is to remember that citations go after the punctuation marks. You did that for the most part, but there are just a couple of places where the citation is before the period.

Overall, the draft is looking pretty good so far. I’m excited to see what the final product looks like.