User:Zjhjeremy/Mole's World/Qaniaf Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Zjhjeremy


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Zjhjeremy - Mole's World


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Mole's World

Evaluate the drafted changes

 * Good idea to include that the game has shut down in the lead as this is a very important fact!
 * I see that you removed the image that was already on the page - I would suggest to have an image (maybe one of the game icon) so it sets an idea to the readers of what the game looks like
 * Try to add new sections to the articles to give more information about the game itself
 * The history of the game
 * The background and innovation of Taomee as the game developer
 * Why the game shut down in 2015
 * The statistics of the game and how well it did when it was still active


 * For the plot, maybe elaborate more on the characters - who they are and their background story
 * As for the gameplay,
 * For the mini games, you can list all the games that are available and elaborate on each
 * Explain the prizes/rewards if you succeed at a game
 * You noted that the game has updates along the way, you can also add a section for this under "Development" and to explain the growth of the game as well as the changes that were made along the years
 * For the "Reception" section - add more notes from other sources such as magazines, game reviews, etc.
 * It looks like the only changes you made was that once sentence in the lead and you didn't add anything more for the rest of the article
 * The tone and grammar of the article are all perfect - no mistakes made there
 * Overall, I would add more information to the article