User:Zmbashir/Women’s Center For Legal Aid and Counseling (WCLAC)/Lightnessofbeing23 Peer Review

General info
This article was written by Zmbashir, DinoLover34, Sarahkoussa, and Faith.m7.
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 * User:Zmbashir/Women’s Center For Legal Aid and Counseling (WCLAC)
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Lead
Though the lead section is short, it provides essential information about WCLAC that would be helpful to a reader looking to get a brief overview on the organization. I think the authors could add the date the organization was established and their advocacy tactics to this section. By adding these details, I think the lead section would provide a more comprehensive summary of the contents of their article. Also, I would just make sure to consolidate the two sections titled "Introduction" and "Intro" into one singular lead section.

Content
As this is a new article, I would make sure that it meets the notability requirements for Wikipedia. I only see around 3-4 sources with most of them coming from over 20 years ago. I would try to look for more recent sources, especially because this organization is still active and doing important work. Writing about their recent advocacy would add important depth to the article. Generally, I really appreciate the fact that this article sheds a light on Palestinian feminism as that is not a perspective that is typically examined or centered in Western/English-speaking conversations on the topic. I also think the article is structured in a very intuitive and easy-to-read way.

Tone and Balance
I think the majority of this article does a great job at providing a neutral and unbiased perspective on the work of the WCLAC. However, I think that the "Mission against Femicide" section could possibly get flagged for using biased language. Writing this section walks a difficult line because you have to balance the horrific and tragic subject matter with neutral phrasing. I think this could be amended by citing sources for the Palestinian family dynamics, gender hierarchies, and femicide coverups that the first paragraph is discussing. I also saw very minute instances of potentially argumentative/biased language in other sections. For example, in the "Foundation" section it states that "there are so many loopholes." I think by cutting the phrase "so many", this sentence would be good. Also uses of the word "just", "significant", and "vital" could be considered biased so I would find other words/edit those out as well.

Sources and References
As stated before, I think finding more recent sources could really elevate the content of this article. The sources you currently have seem reputable and reliable even if they seem to provide a perspective that speak more to the early days of the WCLAC. With the addition of more sources, I believe that the article would be able to provide more relevant information -- especially considering the violence against Palestinian women that is currently ongoing. Besides that, my main suggestion on this front would be to add in source citations via Wikipedia's cite tool and add the "References" template at the bottom of the article.

Organization
This draft is very well-organized. I saw no issues with grammar, readability, or structure. I appreciate that the authors didn't use overly-flowery language and were able to get straight to the point of the WCALC's history and mission.

Images and Media
There are no images or media currently on the page. I think maybe the authors could add the company's logo (only if allowed under Wikipedia's copyright restrictions), some pictures of the Model Parliaments, the founders, and/or other advocacy work the WCLAC has done. Though these images are not necessary, I think it would add a nice touch.

New Article Feedback
I think this topic does meet Wikipedia's notability requirements, but just barely. It seems that because this organization is still working to advocate for Palestinian women there could be more contemporary sources added to flesh out the content. Moreover, I think the article could definitely hyperlink to already existing Wikipedia articles like NGO, gender equality, honor killings, Palestine, Jerusalem, model parliament, Hamas, Palestinian Authority, and Jenin.

Overal Impressions
This is a good first draft for the Wikipedia article on WCLAC. I find it very impressive that the authors were able to gather all of this information on a group that previously did not have a Wikipedia page. Through the publication of this article, a new perspective on Palestinian feminism and Palestinian women's advocacy will be added to the site. My suggestions for improvement include: consolidation of content, addition of sources, editing down biased language, and inclusion of visuals.