User:Zpeeran/Epidemiology of attention deficit hyperactive disorder/SFMA25 Peer Review

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 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Zpeeran and wiki.insight


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Epidemiology of attention deficit hyperactive disorder
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
The introductory paragraph was a little confusing as it starts off with an introduction to ADHD but then there is a mentioning of hyperkinetic disorder which was a little distracting and I am unsure of the relation between the two. I would recommend improving the transition. I think having a little bit of a stronger and more thorough introduction would significantly improve this article, perhaps including a little bit of background on what ADHD is would help. I know the focus of the article is on the epidemiology but having some background on ADHD I think is still relevant. I like the organization of the article and going through the epidemiology by continents and then subdividing into specific countries that have data available. The section on the United Kingdom doesn't have any epidemiological information, if the data is available I would recommend adding it or removing that section completely. Most of the sources are pretty old like from 2003, 2011, etc. It seems like you added some more up to date information which is good and I would recommend continuing to do that. The article was neutral and I didn't notice any bias. You did a good job of addressing both sides of reasoning for why ADHD rates are lower in females. The links that I checked were working. You did a good job of making claims and bringing up viewpoints and information that was supported by sources which you accurately referenced. The sources appear to be unbiased scientific studies. I think the Asia section which was a new addition was great. It was well-organized, provided an introduction on ADHD epidemiology in the continent as a whole and then reviewed a couple of specific countries with data available. The sources were reliable, unbiased, up to date and most were from around 2018.