User:Zraerobertson/Participatory democracy/MathisBitton Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Zraerobertson


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Participatory democracy

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead: The lead was (and remains) good. It captures the main points of the article and includes a good introductory sentence to summarise the topic of the article. The lead could outline the structure of the article better.

Content: The content is excellent for every section except the "Models of Democracy" one. For every other section, the scholarship mobilised is diverse, the sources are up to date, the content does an apt job at going into details on the relevant argument and sources, etc. The "Models of Democracy" section feels rushed -- while this is not the centre of the article, a broader overview of each model (with some helpful references) would be better. For instance, what's the actual relationship between direct democracy and participatory democracy? The article does not spell it out. What about attempts to make representative democracy more participatory? On the whole, I think this section contrasts with the rest at present -- which is totally expected since this is a draft in progress.

Tone and balance: Great throughout -- neutral content, elegant but simple prose-style, both sides presented in the evaluation section. Nothing to change here.

Sources: Great -- varied, different types but most are reliable sources, a lot of peer-reviewed articles. Good overview of the literature -- sources up to date. My only criticism would be to add more primary source links for classical texts (i.e. for Plato and others, most of the sources cited point to secondary sources about these classical texts; it would be good to cite primary references as well).

Organisation: Clear, easy to read, well-structured -- nothing to change as far as organisation is concerned.

Overall Impression: Apart from the "Models of Democracy" section at the end, which may need more work/details, this is excellent throughout. Clear, concise, organised, well-sourced, and informative. Congrats!