User:Zrbelleisle/Grave of the Fireflies/Briannabryant2 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Zrbelleisle


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Zrbelleisle/Grave_of_the_Fireflies?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Grave of the Fireflies

Evaluate the drafted changes
First, your edits in your sandbox are a bit hard to find, so maybe you could bold the sentences you add? I do think the point that Seita hid their mother's death early on in the plot section is important to clarify. I like your addition in the Original Development section about the cremation scene.

Your sources are solid, because even though they are not peer-reviewed secondary sources, you are getting information from direct interviews. As a suggestion, maybe you could go to Google Scholar and search the movie title to see what secondary sources come up that could beef up your article.

As for criticisms, I do think that your sentence organizational changes in the second and third paragraphs of the plot section are too wordy and sounded more concise in the original section.

Overall, your added content is neutral and from reliable sources, but there are some aspects of your edits that could be clearer.