User:Zrbelleisle/Grave of the Fireflies/Willa39 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Zrbelleisle


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Zrbelleisle/Grave_of_the_Fireflies?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Grave of the Fireflies

Evaluate the drafted changes
Looking at the edits made to this article, I viewed the changes in 2 parts: the rewording of the plot section and the additions to the musical score. Firstly, while the changes made to the plot section certainly don't take away from the article, I am unsure as to how much the readability of the section changed or how much it truly needed to from the first article. However, having not seen the film, it may make more sense after viewing it. In the additions to the music section including a complete list of scores used is an appreciated addition to the article, and the only suggestion I would make would be the removal of the quote from Mamiya, as it does not directly pertain to the movie itself or these specific works. However, an addition which cements either of those connections would make the quote appropriate.