User:Zstillman/Brand piracy/ALR Student Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Zstillman


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Zstillman/Brand_piracy?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
I recommend starting a new paragraph after the first few sentences. Right now there is no lead.

Is the quote from Robert Tonnis in italics for a reason? It might be better to keep it in plain text and use quotation marks. It would also be good to explain who Robert Tonnis is and why I care about his definition of brand piracy.

I don't know what MNE means, use the full name before abbreviating.

Citing to In re trade-mark cases in support of the SC's interest in protecting trademark is good, but it would be helpful to give a little information about the case or explain why that case is cited instead of any others.

You cite to the supreme court and the trademark office, it would be good to cite the lanham act as well.

The sentence ending in cite 6 is a little confusing.

I'm not familiar with investopedia, is that an authoritative enough website?

My biggest piece of advice is to break up the text into thematic paragraphs. At minimum you could start a new paragraph after cite 2 and cite 6. The last paragraph seems like it belongs at the beginning of the article when you talk about the effect of brand piracy instead of after talking about customs seizing and destroying counterfeit goods.