User:Zstillman/Brand piracy/DeLawZiuzia Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Zstillman


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Zstillman/Brand_piracy?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Brand piracy

Evaluate the drafted changes
The original article is a bit bare in the introduction, but your contributions provide a lot of meaningful details. You did really well by introducing various case law, statutues, and the Constitution. Your sources look up to date and solid. You also remained neutral while presenting the information.

Structurally, I would probably start a new paragraph with the sentence starting "Counterfeiting is also considered..."

If you want to go into more detail about inititial interest confusion, you could check out Brookfield Communications, Inc. v. West Coast Entertainment Corp. 174 F.3d 1036 (9th Cir. 1999), Network Automation, Inc. v. Advanced Systems Concepts, Inc ., 638 F.3d 1137, 1149 (9th Cir. 2011) (“[B]ecause the sine qua non of trademark infringement is consumer confusion, when we examine initial interest confusion, the owner of the mark must demonstrate likely confusion, not mere diversion.”).and https://blog.ericgoldman.org/archives/2012/06/more_evidence_t.htm.

Overall, your draft looks solid.

RESPONSE:

Thank you for your comments. I am going to check out that source and potentially add it into my draft. Your feedback is also very informative and will help me with improving my article.