User:Zxmaria/The Little Mermaid (1989 film)/Mglamb Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Maria and Isabella


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Ivitello/sandbox

Evaluate the drafted changes
Maria and Isabella,

You guys did a good job providing extensive content and detailed examples from the film. In the introduction, I would recommend being a little less direct and start with a general comment about how various ecological principles were present in the film. Following the introduction, I would insert a sub-topic such as ‘anthropomorphizing’ before going into detail about that idea. This organization could be used for all of your sub-topics throughout your article to enhance the flow of ideas. I thought all of your sources were perfectly implemented within the article. Your content and examples are all accurate and relevant. I really enjoyed how you went into detail about which interactions were realistic and which were not. However, I felt like they could have been better organized rather than all in one paragraph. If you separate the instances of mutualism, predation, commensalism, etc. and then detail which characters were involved the flow will improve dramatically. Specifically, the paragraph on trophic levels within the film is a perfect opportunity to separate the characters by level. A few images could also be beneficial to the reader here. Overall, you guys go into great detail on the different concepts which is very informative. By adding sections for each sub-topic the flow of ideas will be enhanced.

Mason