User talk:1347ad1437/sandbox

First, I am providing some more specific feedback as I read through. · Make sure that you are consistent in your use of the terms "VCSO" or "VISCO". You use both interchangeably, so pick one and stick with it. · In your introduction, I would consider a statement or two that describes what makes VCSO Girls distinct from the other Gen Z subcultures that you reference. In doing so, you should also introduce the overall trends that define a VCSO Girl. · Your reference to the 'ugly shoe trend' is not necessarily intuitive to a reader uninformed about the topic - maybe expand on this. · Under "Social Media Usage", I would introduce this topic as the relationship between other social media platforms and VCSO. Explicitly state that each of the following platforms have contributed to the rise of VCSO in some way. · After reading through each section, I think you should consider reformatting the structure of your article. This is completely up to you, but the use of so many sub-headers disrupts the flow of the article to an extent. It might be beneficial to group your topics under things like "VSCO Fashion Trends", "Popularity of VSCO on Other Social Media Platforms", and then a section on controversy. These are all just some ideas - I can also see the benefit to grouping your topics into much more specific headers. · At different points you allude to things that have contributed to the rise of this subculture. Maybe make a distinct section that explores this idea further - providing the reader with a clearer picture of how this trend began and has grown would be interesting. · I know that it's a first draft, but make sure that you clean up syntax and grammar in certain section. For example, under clothing you should combine the first two sentences - "VSCO Girls are often seen wearing over-sized T-shirts that are long enough to cover their shorts". There are a few other areas like this than could use some touching up.

Overall, I think you effectively provide the reader with an understanding of what a VSCO girl is. You do this is an objective manner and do a good job including various viewpoints. I like your section on controversy and would definitely like to see this expanded. As I mentioned before, I personally think it's very interesting to explore how different sub-cultures emerge as well as their societal impacts.

Colt24 (talk) 18:20, 17 October 2019 (UTC)

The article starts with introducing the VSCO girls, a subculture of Gen Z. The author does a good work by listing and explaining the shared characteristics of the VSCO. The article also cites and mentions statistics in the section social media usage, environmental concern and controversy that helps the reader to understand the trends of the subculture. The article is also well structured and the sections are easy to follow. The author could talk more about the demographics of the VSCO girls. Additionally, there was few grammatical errors which could be edited to convey more clear message. The most important thing the author could do well is to add more descriptive detail in the some sections. Furthermore, the article could also talk briefly about the history or origination of this subculture. However, if the article is just focusing on introduction to VSCO girl, then this article does a fine work providing overview of the subculture.Aditya.jalan8 (talk) 18:42, 17 October 2019 (UTC)