User talk:18bethanyh/sandbox

The opening sentence reads awkwardly. Maybe separate it into two separate sentences.

Repetition of “both of these occupations” sounds strange

Blackwell “because passionate” just typo im assuming

"Elizabeth Blackwell had her first..." Maybe add a sentence at the end to wrap it up better. Ends kinda choppy

"Elizabeth was born..." Add a semicolon or something (idk their specific uses but it seems it would fit) after “She had four maiden aunts [_]”

Paragraph ends nicely

Couellette215 (talk) 13:55, 28 November 2018 (UTC)couellette215

Very good work.

I would think about adding an external link to the Geneva Medical College. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Mansourkuleib (talk • contribs) 14:02, 28 November 2018 (UTC)

First Paragraph -The second sentence is a bit of a run-on. -Fix verb tense of “remain” in 3rd sentence. -Possibly add at least one source for the introductory paragraph.

Second Paragraph -Maybe consider the phrase “career pathways” for the first sentence. -Add a comma after “1800s” in the second sentence. -Change because to “became” in the third sentence. -Consider changing “a lot of” to “much” in the fourth sentence. -Consider adding citations ion this paragraph as well.

Third Paragraph -Hyperlink Buffalo Medical Journal if possible in first sentence. -The second and third sentences could be combined. -Consider adding citations to this paragraph as well.

Early life

First Paragraph -In the first sentence, perhaps Blackwell’s siblings’ activities don’t need to be in parentheses, also add a comma after “John.” -Add a comma after “Lucy” in the second paragraph. -Perhaps you can hyperlink “child rearing.” -Add citations in this paragraph.

Second Paragraph. -Hyperlink “New York City” if not already in the original. -Add a comma after “17” in the second paragraph. -Add at least one citation to this paragraph. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Mpr3300 (talk • contribs) 14:08, 28 November 2018 (UTC)

Hobart and William Smith College, Geneva Medical College, Cincinnati, Ohio, - add internal links "As a result, she was rather socially isolated from all but her family as she grew up" where did this information come from? — Preceding unsigned comment added by Lordakowski (talk • contribs) 14:24, 28 November 2018 (UTC)

in text links are done very well.