User talk:1990Ben/sandbox/final article

Hi 1990Ben, Last sentence of Lead paragraph you need to identify that this article is about the former not the latter. Also need a summary of the issues raised in the article. Gender section: "Historically, the term gender..." (gender is a link in original article but is better as a link to the first use of 'gender' in this section ie the first word). "Their focus on power and hierarchy ... materialist feminism" Specify who 'they' are and put in link to materialist feminism (there is one called 'material feminism' and marxist plus a reference for this observation - if its from Alsop et. al. Say 'Alsop et. al. argue that ...." Could not the reference to Marecek et. al. be deleted and simply put in the link to social constructionism? The link (in the original) is missing from the last sentence in Gender Roles section. Gender Performance section: The original has a link to a 'doing gender' page here,not sure why you've taken it out. Links are important to readers and editors alike. Suggest a sub heading under Gender Performance, 'gender performativity' to break up and introduce the discussion of Butler. Overall your changes make the original article more focused on the topic. JaneHaggis 23:21, 20 October 2019 (UTC)

1990Ben, I hope you consider publishing and would urge you to contact Ckgreen(another student in our class) who has done a revision of the same page. Between the two of you, you could really enrich this page on social construction of gender. JaneHaggis 04:29, 21 October 2019 (UTC)