User talk:217.138.40.74

Your submission at Articles for creation: By Miles (June 20)
 Your recent article submission to Articles for Creation has been reviewed! Unfortunately, it has not been accepted at this time. The reason left by HenryTemplo was:

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HenryTemplo (talk) 10:37, 20 June 2022 (UTC)


 * Hi Henry,
 * Thanks for your message and for reviewing the draft so quickly. I'm struggling to work out why the article keeps getting rejected as it's all factual and uses very trusted news sources, including the BBC!
 * Are you able to flag any specific paragraphs, phrases or sources that are causing the issues specifically please? I can then edit or remove entirely.
 * Wikidibo 217.138.40.74 (talk) 13:40, 6 October 2022 (UTC)
 * Hi IP user,
 * I reviewed this article a while back, so apologies if I end up repeating myself! With that said, when opening the draft, the first thing I read is a external link, a big no-no in Articles, generally speaking (see WP:EXTERNAL). To your point on the sources, yes, you've used some reliable (trusted) sources (like the BBC), but also some not reliable sources, like The Sun (see WP:THESUN). I'd recommend removing those sources and any information which is only supported by those sources. Now, there's a few other prose issues, which I won't go into too much detail on (yet), but I would strongly recommend reading WP:NPOV. Try to avoid advert/marketing speak, it can be subtle yet noticeable! Also, if you are being paid for any of your edits on Wikipedia, or if you have any conflict of interest on the subject of the draft, please follow the relevant instructions (click on the blue links :)). With that all said, feel free to message me here or on my talk page about anymore questions you might have, and have a great day! HenryTemplo 17:53, 6 October 2022 (UTC)