User talk:21stcenturyartist/sandbox/Perseus Freeing Andromeda

I think the lead section is good. its direct and gets to many points in not so many sentences. for some reason in your sandbox, the lead section is all the way in the bottom. by the headings you have already made I can see that when you are done with this article you will have a variety of information so the coverage balance will be good. all the content is neutral as well and your sources are reliable. I like how you added the mythology heading. this can help the reader to understand the original story of what is being depicted in the painting. what I would critique is probably your sentence structure. I struggle a lot wit this as well. I noticed in your mythology section, you use a lot of commas. maybe you should use the word "and" or just cut the sentences up more with periods. there are also some typos where you capitalized letters that I don't think should be capitalized.

Jdementor (talk) 20:22, 18 October 2020 (UTC)