User talk:2620:102:401F:6000:D:D29:88FC:C4FE

Maneesh,

I enjoyed reading your page on Jocelyn Moorhouse. I think you added a good amount of information to her page, not too many details about early childhood or career but just enough to provide the reader a sufficient amount of background. You have good transitions between your paragraphs, especially when talking about the various things she produced like her movies and plays. Maybe one piece of advice is just to make the sentences within the paragraph less choppy to make them flow a little better so it is easier for the reader to read. However, I like how the page is structured and overall think it is a simple and straightforward read.

```` Lauren Zazzarino