User talk:51.7.229.212

I was in the midst of writing this to post on the article talk page when the user blocked me:

To note the poor quality of the previous text, which I fixed, but which two editors have unfixed without explanation:


 * 1) It is not grammatical to say "It is the first public park built in Moscow for over 50 years". That would be fine in a contemporary news report. It is not correct now; it should be in the past tense.
 * 2) Wikipedia is not a travel guide or an advertisement. "nature and architecture act as one", "Visitors can enjoy a river overlook...", "Another advantage of the new park is a picturesque view..." etc etc simply aren't of any value. They don't fulfil the basic requirements of an encyclopaedia article and appear to have been added by someone associated with the park, trying to promote it.

More problems that I did not get the chance to fix:


 * 1) "Time magazine puts Zaryadye Park on 2018 list of World's Greatest Places" - obviously written by a Russian-speaker, it is totally grammatically incorrect, using the wrong tense and omitting articles and pronouns, as well as not being formatted correctly.
 * 2) "The floating bridge is a thin air structure" - weird nonsense, needs rewriting.
 * 3) The image gallery adds no value at all, not even having captions to identify what the images are. It should be removed.
 * 4) Apart from these specific problems, the article is in general excessively detailed and badly written. For example: "The large amphitheatre adjoins to the Philharmonic and it is covered with a dome, the so-called glass bark, to protect the audience from the rain. The amphitheatre is a stepped landscape design descending from the hill to the stage. The spots are made of wood. The paths between the rows are filled with small pebbles and become part of the drainage system. The amphitheatre organically fits into the natural landscape of the park. The large open amphitheatre in Zaryadye can accommodate 1500 spectators." That is excruciating. The encyclopaedic necessity would be fulfilled by a single sentence along the lines of "The park has two amphitheatres, the larger of which is covered by a dome and can hold 1500 spectators.
 * 5) "See also" contains a link to Kitay-gorod - why? The relevance would need to be explained.


 * 51.7.229.212 (talk) 16:03, 29 June 2020 (UTC)

This block log is relevant: https://en.wikipedia.org/w/index.php?title=Special:Log/block&page=User%3A51.7.229.0%2F24 Favonian (talk) 16:06, 29 June 2020 (UTC)
 * Note for the reviewing admin
 * Why? 51.7.229.212 (talk) 16:08, 29 June 2020 (UTC)