User talk:5thMDSS/sandbox

Here are some thoughts!

Okay, so part of your feeling like there isn't flow could be caused by repetitive sentence structure with those first four sentences. So if you rephrase it to something like this:

Noise is unwanted sound that occurs in the environment as a result of many activities. Aircraft, traffic, and neighbors [how are neighbors a source of noise? add more detail] can be sources of noise. Excessive noise exposure may also have psychological impacts.[1] Causal relationships have been discovered between noise and psychological effects such as annoyance, psychiatric disorders, and effects on psychosocial well-being.

All the same info, just variance in the order, and two of the sentences combined into one. I also noted a couple places I felt you could expand. Get those words on the paaaage all the words, yes yes.

Huba1080 (talk) 02:22, 3 December 2017 (UTC)

Thank you
Thank you, Kinzee, for your input. I will make those recommended revisions. 5thMDSS (talk) 02:32, 3 December 2017 (UTC)