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Campbell Lutyens
Please note that your edits to the Campbell Lutyens and Private equity secondary market pages are well documented as unecyclopedic and unproductive advertisements. The Campbell Lutyens article as it was originally constructed was just spam and I took it upon myself to clean it up because I thought there was a tenuous notability argument that could be made in favor. You activities do not encourage that support.

In looking at the firm's website, I understand your enthusiasm (listing on www.campbell-lutyens.com/team.aspx) but this is not the proper forum for such enthusiasm. I have added this page to my watchlist and will observe any edits made here either by you, by 83.217.125.242 or by new users with great care.

I WOULD strongly encourage you to spend your time related to this article adding references and third party information that can help make this a real article worth keeping.&#124;► ϋ r b a n я e n e w a l ◄&#124; (talk) 17:10, 17 June 2008 (UTC)

Your edits
If you are going to make contributions you need to get used to people making changes to your text and your response should be to think how to constructively move forward. I kept the bulk of what you were trying to say but I changed the text because it (1) did not read as well as it could and (2) was too casual / not particularly encyclopedic in tone. Also it was not referenced / cited in any way. For your information, I picked out the parts that I thought were either unreferenced / unproven or where I thought you were just not clear what you were trying to say:


 * "As 2008 will mark the collapse of the credit market in history, the secondary market is inevitably affected" [overstated / not referenced]


 * "more significant discount to the underlying manager's net asset value characterize the impact of the credit crunch on the secondary market" [Odd construction]


 * "While prices are down, spreads widen and volumes are up" [This is not clear or referenced]


 * "several large institutions continue to actively manage their private equity portfolio taking advantage of arbitrage opportunities" [What arbitrage opportunity are your referring to?]

Hope that is helpful. |► ϋrban яenewaℓ  •  TALK  ◄| 14:54, 25 November 2008 (UTC)