User talk:A.yap/sandbox

Hey Alissa, I like your article. It highlights a very pressing social trait and you seem to have a solid outline on how to approach the topic well. There isn't much to the piece yet, but I believe the topics you have outlined will be a very solid overview of the term. Just make sure to add a paragraph or more information to each section you briefly introduced. Additionally, the "road map", or organization of the topics you introduce, is good. It is logical and each section leads into the next.

I will not compare your sections to the graded rubric yet just due to the insufficient amount of information for your page. But I think you have a lot of potential here and just need to elaborate by adding information. Additionally, your lead section right now is just a definition. I recommend adding more to it, so it introduces the article concisely. Perhaps even add a real life situation there, a popular person or known identity, so the reader can have context going into the piece.

As for a neutral viewpoint, you can try to add a different viewpoint. Not necessarily something disproving the topic, but something to show there can be different characterization of the traits rather than what you talk about.

Hi Alissa! Right off the bat, the organization and flow of your article was great. The table of contents is very easy to follow, and its very coherent from the introduction of maladjustment to its causes, ending with some associated phenotypes. I think it would strengthen this article further if you include some information about demographics of this condition; age, race, sex groups that are more afflicted. Otherwise, the content is clear and easy to understand, and you stayed with a neutral tone throughout the article, which is good. I don't think images are necessary; it would be hard to find pictures that represent maladjustment. It's good that you included citations and sources for your claims. It may also help to have a little summary to end the article!Joon Hong (talk) 23:59, 21 June 2018 (UTC)