User talk:A4j023e11

Moved page
Hi, I saw that you started making notes and plans in the mainspace at Talk:Health sousveillance, however you should only move content live once it is ready, meaning that it's a complete article that establishes notability for the topic. The reason for this is that moving it before it's ready puts the article at risk of getting deleted, even if it's only on the talk page. I've moved this to your userspace at User:A4j023e11/Health sousveillance so you can work on it at your leisure. I recommend working on it in your userspace, as this gives you the time to work on expanding the information and improving it without fear of it being immediately deleted. Shalor (Wiki Ed) (talk) 14:55, 13 October 2017 (UTC)

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--- Peer Edit Notes (Obtusesquare):

- for your lead section, the sentence structures are a bit repetitive which makes the flow a bit difficult to read - provide some examples of health sousveillance tools (I understand it as a concept, but I'm still not quite sure what it tangibly entails without a concrete example) - perhaps delve a bit into what the state of health sousveillance is now and allude to what the rest of your article will be about - describe how it is distinct from health tracking and surveillanceObtusesquare (talk) 21:12, 27 October 2017 (UTC)