User talk:ABBslp

Welcome!
Hello, ABBslp, and welcome to Wikipedia! My name is Ian and I work with the Wiki Education Foundation; I help support students who are editing as part of a class assignment.

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Hi!
Hello ABBslp. Let's talk. Jogruber (talk) 15:10, 15 September 2017 (UTC)

Talk page question
Hi! is the content expert for your course so he's the best person to look at your draft, as he'll be more familiar with the sourcing requirements and all. Cheers! Shalor (Wiki Ed) (talk) 19:01, 13 November 2017 (UTC)

Nice work.
 * References go after punctuation, not before. I fixed that in that's there currently.
 * The first two sentences in the first paragraph lack sources.
 * You started a sentence with "therefore", which is a bit of a red flag. When you say "therefore", you're usually drawing a conclusion. You shouldn't be drawing conclusions, you should be reporting on what reliable sources have to say about the topic.
 * Your references are incomplete (they lack years) which is odd if you're using the cite tool on the visual editor. They need years. Ian (Wiki Ed) (talk) 20:56, 15 November 2017 (UTC)