User talk:AFpsu1/sandbox

Hello! You definitely have a good start here. I was just wondering if you could add in your citations and some more details you found about architecture and art before I add in the rubric. Dlewis16 (talk) 06:57, 18 October 2018 (UTC)

Hi! Good topic choice! The first thing that sticks out to me is that you use Mount Vesuvius maybe more than necessary in the geology section. Also in the History section, you mention that after the explosion ash fell on cars which is kind of confusing. Overall though great content that seems to be really well researched so good job! -Brennan

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11/15/2018 Evaluation by Dlewis16

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Meets Expectations Overall reads very well. There are just a few things I would change to help the article read even smoother. In the first sentence, I would take out "that is" (in between volcano and located). In the last sentence of the Geology section, I would remove the comma. In the first sentence of the history section, you write "so many people, and did so much damage," though it may read nicer if removed the "so" in both spots and replaced the second one with something like "did a great deal of damage." Also, In the history section, you write "Since the destructive eruption that destroyed Pompeii, Mount Vesuvius has only erupted once since." In that sentence, you write "since" twice, so I would just remove the second one.

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Meets Expectations Again, the article reads well, the only thing that stands out is that the phrase "one of the most" is written quite a few times. I understand why and I probably have written the same thing, but I just wanted to bring that to attention.

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Exceeds Expectations You have good paragraphs and everything seems in the right place. Maybe just add a "reference" heading.

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Nearly Meets Expectations Some of your citations are showing up as red saying that they are missing information, such as date, author, and issues with the weblink. Also, one of your citations are repeated in the reference section, so you can just group them on 1 number. The only other thing I would change would be to link specific words to other designated Wikipedia pages.

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Nearly Meets Expectations You wrote that Vesuvius only erupted twice, once in 79 AD and once in 1944. I just did a quick search so you might have more information, but I was able to find several more severe eruptions that had occurred after 79 AD, including major ones in 1631 and 1906.

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Meets Expectations You wrote plenty and have all of the required citations. The only note I would make is that there is a lot written on geology and less on culture/politics/economy/social topics. Though I think it flows and shows an important piece of history for Italy (culture).

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Meets Standards - First sentence of last paragraph, you don't need the apostrophe in 'it's beer'

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Meets standards - I would caution you on the last sentence of the intro - "Irish people have been known to be some of the friendliest people in the world" seems like an opinion statement rather than fact.

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Exceeds Expectations - It's nice how many Wiki-links you have in your article for reference.

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Nearly meets standard. I'd double check your sources on the origin of Gaelic language. I think it originated in Ireland, not Scotland.

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Meets standard. - You might include a brief note on how the potato came to Ireland. I was curious and ended up Googling it.

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12/5/2018 Evaluation by Mariaalto
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References Exceeds Expectations — Preceding unsigned comment added by Mariaalto (talk • contribs) 01:44, 6 December 2018 (UTC)

Editing User talk:B_am_240
Spelling/Grammar Meets Expectations. I didn't notice any mistakes

Language Exceeds Expectations. I thought your descriptions were very engaging.

Organization Exceeds Expectations. Discussing the people, then dancing, then food and drink was a nice order to use and kept the information interesting.

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Completion Meets Expectations (so far). You're almost to your required number of sources. Maybe to move that process along you could include examples of the different Irish dances we may have already run into in popular culture?

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Overall, good job and nice topic choice! B am 240 (talk) 03:23, 6 December 2018 (UTC)