User talk:AL2015/sandbox

Paraphrase issue w Coogan
In grading your intro exercise,, I notice that your sentence is too close a paraphrase of Coogan. Either the exact sentence should be used with quotation marks (which isn't encyclopedic style) or Coogan's point needs to be expressed in your own words, incl different phrasing and sentence structure. ProfGray (talk) 13:52, 18 February 2015 (UTC)

Wife-sister feedback
AL, good start and it's a key point from Coats. Your second sentence would benefit from a copy edit. What is (or should be) the subject of the sentence? Look at the "it" in the last clause. I'd suggest that you redo that sentence, but keep the emphasis in the end on his point about blessing. Let me know how this goes...

Also, the citation is incorrect. This is a chapter in an edited book (a collection of papers). The chapter title goes first, usually in quotation marks, and then the book. Perhaps it is confusing because, in this case, Coats is both the author of the chapter and the editor of the collection. Thanks, ProfGray (talk) 15:26, 18 February 2015 (UTC)

Covenant
Hi. Your Mendenhall outline looks good, User:AL2015, do you have a copy that preserves the outline formatting? ProfGray (talk) 17:51, 2 March 2015 (UTC)
 * Follow-up -- what was the event that you've mentioned in (b) upfront? Do you recap his main claim in the outline? ProfGray (talk) 03:47, 4 March 2015 (UTC)


 * User:AL2015, your paragraphs look good. The first mentions Mendenhall, might want to do the same with Weinfield. Also, does he consider Genesis 15 in relation to source theory, and/or in relation to Genesis 17? With the first sentence, it looks like the paragraph indicates how this fits within his larger argument, though I'm wondering if it can be spelled out more clearly for Wikipedia readers. Thanks! ProfGray (talk) 19:12, 9 March 2015 (UTC)