User talk:ARoble12/sandbox

Assignment 1
Nice job. Here are a couple of additional references you might want to take a look at:


 * Twenty-Sixth Symposium on Biotechnology for Fuels and Chemicals
 * Seifert et al. (2011)


 * Citation

Medmyco (talk) 23:34, 20 October 2013 (UTC)

Comment
Hi, your article is looking really good so far. I think you could improve the section on disease a bit. Maybe you could discuss specific cases in a bit more detail. Also, it might be a good idea for you to talk about disease symptoms, transmission, and pathology if you want to go that route. You mention that L. hoffmanni is an opportunistic pathogen, I think you should define this to give the reader the idea that this fungus will infect immune-compromised hosts. Lastly, you could add links to some of the anti-fungals you have listed. Great job, good luck with the rest of the article.Renatofrart (talk) 22:16, 31 October 2013 (UTC)

Hi. here are some suggestions,

1) Maybe you can put "occurrence" into "ecology" section.

2) maybe can talk a bit more about proteolitic enzymes, what substrates they work on, their effect on fungus.

3) This fungus is an opportunistic pathogen, maybe talk about specific population groups that are susceptible.

Mengf123 (talk) 20:00, 31 October 2013 (UTC)

Hi, I just read through your article. It's coming along pretty nicely, however I would suggest that in your introduction where you mention a "contradictory appearance", it would be a good idea to explain what about it is contradictory instead of leaving it as a cliffhanger. In your sentence about thermotolerance, it may be a good idea to provide some further context around that finding because it seems a little obtuse when you mention "out of four (both environmental)". Also, a minor edit, I think you mean to say "proteolytic" versus "proteolitic" in the physiology section. Keep it up!Rptseng (talk) 01:31, 1 November 2013 (UTC)

Peer Review
Hi there! Your article looks like it is coming along great so far. However, I do have some suggestions that would perhaps make it a bit more clear for readers. The "occurrence" subheading is a bit confusing for me personally. Perhaps I would understand it better if it was more expanded upon, however with what you have written right now, it seems to be redundant with the "ecology" subsection. Also, you mention quite a few effects of the fungus under the "disease" subsection. If you are able to find out more about each effect I suggest you create additional subheadings under the disease section to distinguish between the diseases it has been seen to cause. A section on treatment or anti-fungal therapy would also be great. Good luck and keep up the good work!

Shahrzad436 (talk) 16:53, 1 November 2013 (UTC)

Peer Comment
Hello! Good job so far! I agree with the previous comment about expanding the disease section. Since you mention at the beginning that it has been often erroneously classified as dermatiaceous perhaps a section on diagnosis might be useful. Here is a good textbook:

Marr, edited by Johan A. Maertens, Kieren A. (2007). Diagnosis of fungal infections. New York: Informa Healthcare. ISBN 9781420017182.

This following article is a case study of successful treatment of this fungus – might be interesting to include it as a corollary to the statements you make at the end of the disease section, or maybe present them as directions for moving forward with regards to determining an effective therapy in the future.

Chang, C. Y., Schell, W. A., Perfect, J. R. and Hulka, G. F. (2005), Novel Use of a Swimming Pool Biocide in the Treatment of a Rare Fungal Mastoiditis. The Laryngoscope, 115: 1065–1069. doi: 10.1097/01.MLG.0000163338.45700.FE

Best of luck with the remainder of the article. Bmarz436 (talk) 03:25, 2 November 2013 (UTC)