User talk:AVavrinak/Drug pollution

Feed Back Comment
Hey Jolie and Joey, Thank you guys so, much for the feedback and help and shaping this content to what it is. I appreciated the article you linked to me as it was very insightful in the more direct impact of Drug pollution rather than the secondary and even tertiary effects you often see in One Health Articles. I have gone ahead and deleted some of the clutter, as well as revamped some of the content in the article. Sadly "Final Touches" have never been my strong suit and if you read this before my wife gets home you may still find quite a few typos. Luckily she makes a decent editor for me. I know this originally only started as a class project but this is also the content that I am expanding on for my Masters Thesis and I remain interested in expanding it past the requirements of this class. If you would like to keep an eye on it Im very appreciative in hearing more of your feedback as well as your insight. I will also email a copy of this directly to joey as well. Once again thank you guys soomuch for your help --AVavrinak (talk) 00:40, 23 April 2021 (UTC)

External Review
Hi AVavrinak - My name is Jolie, and I'm the Project Coordinator for the WikiProject Limnology & Oceanography team. Your external reviewer for your article on drug pollution doesn't have a Wikipedia account, so I'm posting the review on their behalf. If you have any questions about your review, or would like to clarify anything, please feel free to contact your reviewer directly using the email address provided at the end of the review. Thanks, and all the best as you wrap up your Wikipedia editing assignment!

EXTERNAL REVIEW

First, to introduce myself, I am Joey Allen, a freshwater ecologist and I am now working as a post-doctoral researcher investigating the effect of multiple stressors (pesticide pollution and climate change) on shallow aquatic ecosystems.

Here are some suggestions to improve your contribution to WP article on drug pollution:

Pay attention to the writing, there are many typos (e.g. “leeching” instead of “leaching”)

For the environmental consequences section, I think you’re focusing on secondary points. For example, the main concern with drug pollution may be a high activity on non-target organisms. You can have a look at this article by Ebele et al. (http://dx.doi.org/10.1016/j.emcon.2016.12.004 and references therein), particularly the toxicity section. Similarly, for the animal health section, you can refer to this article.

For the human health points, I think the antibiotic resistance is an essential point and should be more developed. The nutrient leaching is clearly out of scope in an article on drug pollution.

If you still have question on how to improve your contribution, you can contact me directly at joeyallen@orange.fr

JoGDelta (talk) 21:29, 12 April 2021 (UTC)