User talk:AWeis16/Hashtag activism/On The Dog Watch Peer Review

Hi AWeis16! I completely agree with the two edits that you are considering for the Hashtag activism article. I have copied your information below so that I can reference it:

Your first comment/edit: Under the History category, someone wrote: There has been a shift among activists to participate in interactive communication on the Internet. [1] To me, this seems a bit out of place within the paragraph, or at least lacking.

My peer review comment: I agree that this sentence is either out of place or should be followed by more content to help support it. You could either delete it or possibly provide a few sentences to help provide some more support for the statement?

Your second comment/edit: In the Support category, second paragraph, someone wrote: ..."but after Brown's death"... Who is Brown? They weren't mentioned before. Read article and it says Michael Brown. He was not mentioned before, so add something along the lines of, "But after Michael Brown died at the hands of a police officer in 2014, it increased to..." just so Brown doesn't show up randomly.

My peer review comment: Although, I did see Michael Brown's name earlier in the article under the "Notable Examples- #Blacklivesmatter," it was so far from the Support category and the sentence that you want to edit that it would be hard for the reader to make that connection. So, I think that your edit is the exact change that is needed to make it more understandable for the reader.

I think you are totally on track with your edits! Great job. (I am not 100% sure if this is how we do the peer review, but I am hoping that it works for our class- Angel!)On The Dog Watch (talk) 21:27, 19 February 2021 (UTC)