User talk:AWinslow2020/sandbox/Draft(Depression.Behavioral.Endocrinology)

For your first note, I like how in depth you went into the study while keeping it easy to understand. I would as suggest that you add more than one source for disproving the importance of thyroid hormones (Or any other experiment for that matter) or it may appear bias. As for your other notes on the other research studies, I would go more in depth of the experiment and what pathway that experiment they are trying to determine affects depression and add citations. All together I think you have a strong understanding of your topic but it might be helpful to focus on two or three main researched subtopics on behavioral endocrinology of depression. I see how difficult it is finding hormones and pathways that are proven to cause depression so maybe you should just improve on the studies that disprove certain pathways that are studied the most (I think that might be what you're doing). I would alter the organization of your sandbox when inserting it onto the page because you seem to be summarizing conclusions of one review whereas you should be integrating other studies that test the same thing to make a concise paragraph on conclusions of all experiments. I'd also add maybe symptoms of depression and basic stuff like that for people who are searching for simple things like that. Another thing I would do is provide links to other wiki pages for words like mRNA expression because the average person might not know what that is. This helps alleviate you from having to explain what mRNA is while giving the reader the option to click on the link to see more information about it! Also when you mention CVS, I would mention the non-abbreviated version first with CVS in parentheses because the average person wouldn't know what that means (I would also add a link if the un-abbreviated word is not known to the average person). Jackie542 (talk) 02:25, 26 March 2019 (UTC)

Goal: I want to be able to fully explain the role glucocorticoids in depression. After meeting with Professor McKittrick I was informed to narrow my pathway search and to focus on glucocorticoids and focus on how/ why glucocorticoid receptors are less prevalent in individuals with depression. Also, I will make a new sandbox that doesn't have the notes I have complied for the project and just has the information I wish to publish on the my wiki page. — Preceding unsigned comment added by AWinslow2020 (talk • contribs) 09:20, 15 April 2019 (UTC)