User talk:Aabouche/sandbox

peer review Chika Kasahara
This is excellent!

The new drafted version you all made was a lot more descriptive. It was clear and concise and it builds a great foundation for the rest of the wikipedia article. I think it is great that you all rearranged the first couple of sentences because the original intro talked about the change made in 1999, and then said it was founded in 1992, and then said it changed in 1998. You guys rearranged it so the events were chronological which made way more sense.

I would suggest adding in the fact that the museum played a huge role in making Florida one of the first states to have a mandatory education about the Holocaust in Elementary school. I found that information on the Florida holocaust museum website. I think it is very important for readers to know as soon as they read about the museum but that is just my opinion!

The most important thing to do to keep improving the article is to just keep adding what the museum has done for the community, any facts or figures!

After reading your new intro, I will definitely check my article and make sure the events are in chronological order so thank you!\ Well done! -Chika

Peer Review by Alexis Craighead
Hi!

I think you guys did a good job rewording the drafted section of the article you did so that it sounded better. Some more information would be nice, such as what kind of art do they display at the museum? Who are some of the artists? The smaller sections could use some more organization so that they read better. Maybe try integrating what you have with what already exists in the article in your sandbox so that you can work on making it coherent together.

Good luck! Alexis — Preceding unsigned comment added by ACraigh (talk • contribs) 02:25, 6 November 2018 (UTC)