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Article : Varieties of Capitalism https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Varieties_of_Capitalism#cite_ref-2

What is considered to be the lead section, because there is not content section of headers to indicate otherwise, consists of 625 words and is too long. The main point of the lead section is to address the main topics or general idea of the article though this lead section is mainly an overview of the introduction chapter of this book. The lead section also helps maintain organization in the piece which is something that is lacking in this article. The writing style went back and forth between using plain language and some editorial mistakes, which made it a bit difficult to read, to very technical language and well developed sentence structure. The transition from weak formatting and sentence struct to clear and articulate writing is reason to believe that there are either plagiarism issues or very close paraphrasing. The Wikipedia tutorials clearly state that the individual writing the piece needs to have a clear understanding of the information which can only be gained by extensive research. This clear understanding would ultimately allow the writer to produce a piece that is of their own words and own understanding. Some examples of these sentences are, “They categorized capitalism of different countries into the two types (LME and CME, however there is a third type which is "Hybrid" which consists of countries in the mediterranean ring, but Hall and Soskice only used LMEs and CMEs in their analysis)”. Another issue in this piece is the generality. The writer leave topics unfitted and open ended, not being specific enough on the information they are referring to. One of these examples are, “Institutional complementarities suggest that nations with a particular type of institution then develop complementary institution in other spheres. (for example: countries with stock market liberalization has less labor protection and vice versa)”. First of all the writer misuses brackets in both examples provided and the writing is unclear and unfocused. The writer’s language seems very vague and general, example being, “Extending the scope of Hall and Soskice's framework to countries outside Western Europe and the US, other authors have developed different varieties of capitalism, such as dependent market economies and hierarchical market economies”. The author makes references to unnamed sources by not clearly stating the other authors that they are referring to making this an unreliable statement. The lack of a content section has many consequences to this article. First of all the content section is usually located underneath the lead section which would help indicate what section of the article is the introduction. Also, there is an insufficient amount of headers organizing the piece which makes the article difficult to get through.

This article mainly relies on primary sources, the lack of secondary sources makes the piece feel more like an advertisement rather than an encyclopedia article. Wikipedia requires that all information provided is independent of the subject which is something that was not accomplished in this piece. Therefore the information provided is not so of a reliable secondary source. Also, because there is only reference to one source the information provided cannot be considered notable. This piece lacks citations until the last line of the document where there are to hyperlinks referred to as 1 and 2 and they are not attached to any particular section of information. Also, the citations that do exist cannot be accurately verified. When intending to check the accuracy of the Peter A. Hall external link it brings you to the Harvard University website where you are then made aware that the link itself has either changed or is incorrect. The second link that is supposed to reference David Soskice brings you to the Oxford University website homepage where there is no information pertaining to the article.

The author of this article should consider making drastic changes so that their work is up to par with Wikipedia's standards and requirements AaliyahCS (talk) 18:06, 26 January 2017 (UTC)

The topic of this Wikipedia page has potential to be informative to the public. I propose to extend the lead, history, investments and governance sections while amending the portfolio investment section. This provides more back ground information on intent, financial involvement and political standing. By extending the lead section it will allow the individual to develop a better understanding of the material and establish a neutral voice for the content. The history of Sustainable Development Technology Canada demonstrates the evolution of business relationships, government regulations and diverse methods. Because of this, the history section deserves more in-depth content. By amending the portfolio investment section the document will be sharper and more organized. Several sections such as economic and environmental impacts, partnerships and public involvement sections will also be added. AaliyahCS (talk) 02:15, 14 February 2017 (UTC)

Revised lead section: Sustainable Development Technology Canada, established in 2001 and headquartered in Ottawa, Ontario and exists to fund clean tech initiatives. SDTC’s main goal is to, “Help bridge the gap between research and market entry for Canadian clean tech projects”. Sustainable Development Technology Canada is one of the many initiatives that are attempting to work tis entrepreneurs to bring their cleantech projects to the market.

FUNDING Subsection Funding Received : Subsection Funding Provided: SD Natural Gas Fund, SD Tech Fund….AaliyahCS (talk) 04:36, 14 February 2017 (UTC)