User talk:Abalardo/sandbox

Andrew

This is a good start. You should add links to other WP pages as appropriate. Try to tighten up the writing to make sure that each sentence smoothly follows the previous one. Right now there are gaps in the line of reasoning. Maybe have a colleague not familiar with the topic read it over for clarity. Grade 1.75/2 TomHaffie (talk) 01:12, 11 November 2014 (UTC)