User talk:Abbebren/Sheila Radford-Hill

This article looks good so far. It has a solid introduction. If anything, I would suggest putting the second sentence about her book in a separate section about the book, instead of in the introduction. The section of her education is informative. I would like to know more about Sheila Radford-Hill's activism, so I would suggest a section on activism if you have the time. Make sure to remain neutral; I'm not sure exactly what Wikipedia allows, but the phrases "widely known" or "strenuous" may not be considered neutral. Overall, this is a good start to creating the article. Summerholloway (talk) 16:21, 27 April 2020 (UTC)

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Thank you for the suggestions! I think adding an activism section would be great and I think you may be right about me using bias language. I think most of her influence comes from the book but her role as a Diversity leader could definitely be more emphasized, I'm just having trouble finding information on her in the first place so I'm not sure if there's that much more to say about her activism, besides for explaining the book of course. Thank you so much! — Preceding unsigned comment added by Abbebren (talk • contribs) 03:02, 5 May 2020 (UTC)