User talk:Abbymann1/sandbox

Hi Abby: Not a lot of papers on your exact topic, but I'm sure you'll be able to glean info from the ones you have listed. Also, looks like Sharley recently added a paper (Pitman) that might be relevant. In addition, some of the genetics papers may have geographic info, like the Fooden paper. Good work.Njclum (talk) 18:08, 22 July 2017 (UTC)

Peer Review from Nate: Overall this piece is very good with a lot of relevant content; though improvements can always be made. Some sentences may be shortened especially in the first paragraph, use fewer commas and more periods. Another small improvement that could be made is better transitions from sentence to sentence as the wording is a little awkward in a few places. The last change that I suggest is changing the way the citations are applied. Instead of waiting to list sources used at the end of each paragraph I suggest citing individually by sentence. These are small, easy edits to make and other than what I have already listed this looks very good. (Natefbennett (talk) 15:41, 15 August 2017 (UTC))

Comments on Outline
Hi Abby: Hope you enjoy the eclipse today. Very thorough, but with one caveat: this is more in the form of notes on each article. An outline would put the info in a logical sequence and indicate where it came from. This makes the writing easier.Njclum (talk) 15:19, 21 August 2017 (UTC)

Comments on Rough Draft
Excellent job, Abby, go ahead and post!Njclum (talk) 16:44, 21 August 2017 (UTC)