User talk:Abdoolhan/sandbox

Hi Abbey,

Overall this gives much more depth to the original content and I think will greatly contribute to an understanding of the houses once integrated. I edited your draft below a little and made some suggestions - see bolded text in parentheses.

Additional notes below: -on your citations, citation number 2 shows an error message for the date entry -maybe you can say more about usage of these houses today - not sure if available scholarship to support this though... -on the original page in the summary before history maybe add a sentence that states the use of the houses for workers and later veterans -are you planning to make edits to the original page's text? It seems it could be cleaned up a bit when you add your information in -tone you use seems neutral and appropriate throughout -are victory houses and strawberry houses the same thing? and simplified cape cod? Would maybe also address this in that first paragraph on original wiki page.

Hope that helps. Enjoyed reading about Strawberry Houses!

Elizabeth

Strawberry box houses

One such example of a Strawberry Box house neighborhood exists in the community of Queensway Park, Toronto, Canada. There can be found (rephrase, reads awkwardly) a classic suburban neighborhood with winding streets and roughly 200 homes built in the style of the Strawberry Box. These were meant to be small homes for workers surrounding a park using the plans the government, under the Wartime Housing Corporation, had provided around 1945. (Were they meant to be or were they actually built like this? perhaps clarify, if built like this, would recommend rephrasing to: The neighborhood was comprised of small homes... etc.) This is just small example of a typical construction that flourished thought Canada during the period of WWII.[1] (used word small in sentence before so either strike or replace; maybe "typical mode of construction")

Also called the "Simplified Cape Cod" or "Victory Houses" (make complete sentence and tie in)

One of (the) inciting forces of this small house type and its abundance was the Veterans' Land Act of 1942, which was meant to provide housing for returning veterans and their families. Hoping to avoid the disaster of an earlier act in 1919, the Soldier Settlement Act, which failed to meet the needs of returning soldiers, this act put into place measures to build or finance housing for those returning from war. There was a main objective as well to get people working, specifically by getting them land to farm in order to provide for themselves. In this way the houses ended up being very small to accommodate more land use.[2] (Need to clarify earlier on that the housing was for workers AND later veterans, a bit unclear until next paragraph below)

Because of (Due to the) the large demand for new housing to accommodate workers and later veterans  the houses were designed to be sturdy but economic. Much of the small building was prefabricated and then shipped to the sites to be constructed (do you mean the parts or the actual structure, if parts would clarify to something like: Many of the building components were...). This resulted in very homogenous and uniform developments that sprung up in almost every major city in Canada during the war and post war periods. The houses were often one and one half story (one and a? half stories tall, with gabled roofs and clapboard sidings) and a gabled roof to top it, with a clapboard siding. The streets of this (these) instant neighborhoods were often appropriately (intentionally?) named (to cement their place in time - i.e. Victory or Churchill) things like Victory or Churchill to cement their place in time. [3]

Instructor comments
Your peer reviewer has provided a very detailed review and made some good comments, the most critical of which is a need to explain exactly what portions of the houses were prefabricated, and how. Also, it's great to provide an example, but this might be added to the Toronto section and renamed Examples, so they're all in the same place. Finally, it's not clear whether the text after "Also called the 'Simplified Cape Cod' or 'Victory Houses'" is intended to apply just to the particular example you've cited, or to strawberry box houses in general; if the latter, this should be placed below a shorter section heading. Elizabeth Linden Rahway (talk) 11:27, 3 December 2018 (UTC)