User talk:Abfarzad/sandbox

Introduction My name is Alyson Farzad-Phillips. I am a second year PhD student at the University of Maryland. We are doing a wiki-edu module as part of my COMM 712 course. I will be using this sandbox to evaluate and edit wiki-articles.

Possible Articles to Edit/Create: Celeste Condit: Listed under "notable rhetoricians" for the rhetorical criticism page, but has no page is linked. Will be honored as Public Address Conference in 2018.

Public Rhetoric: Add more theoretical background to counter-publics; include some rhetorician's perspectives on space and place. Add tag for "Rhetoric of Social Change?"

Counter-Mapping: Needs updating. Can bring in some rhetorical scholarship.

Misti's Peer Review
Your article has a succinct and effective lead and is clearly organized. It was fun to learn more about Condit. I have added some minor, suggested edits below, but my overall feedback would be to consider highlighting and explaining some of the specific arguments she has made. Perhaps you could look on Google Scholar to see which of her articles have been cited the most to help determine which articles to highlight in the Contributions section?

A few notes for the lead: The first two footnotes should be moved to after the period. The second sentence is a little unclear. There is either a missing comma or perhaps "arguments" needs to be deleted?

Early Life and Education: A couple of notes need to be moved to outside punctuation.

Career and Major Contributions: "where she remains teaching and researching to this day": Consider reworking to "where she teaches and researches today" or, and "she is still a professor at the University of Georgia today."

Not sure if "assistant" and "associate" need to be capitalized? Could make "focused" present tense if she is still focusing on these issues.

"including genetics and their...": Consider "including genetics and the field's..."

I would consider breaking this into two sentences: "Condit has presented her research not only in communication conferences such as the National Communication Association (NCA) and the Association for the Rhetoric of Science, Technology and Medicine (ARSTM), but also she engages with in science and genetics societies, where Condit presents her rhetorical engagement in hopes to correct public miscommunication about genetics and the genome product.[6]"

After the quote, you have an incomplete thought or some extra words I think: "She is In her capacity to work in conjunction with geneticists and biologists,"

I really like this quote "Condit has been described as "a pioneer in understanding and improving public communication about genetics."[5]" and would consider moving it to earlier in the section to frame her contributions?

Not sure if you need to footnote the individual books?

Add a comma: "Condit has also co-edited three volumes, and she is currently working on her fourth authored book, 9/11s Angry Public Rhetorics: The Role of Emotion in Global Relations.[2]"

"She has received awards regarding her teaching" Consider "She has received teaching awards"

Should you include the Public Address honor in the awards section?

That's all! Love that you worked on Condit! Yangm7 (talk) 00:08, 2 March 2018 (UTC)