User talk:Abicamp/sandbox

This is a good article! It seems very well researched. I do have a few suggestions, though. You include a lot of biographical information about Alison Towner's past and schooling in the first section of your article. Because this comes before the information about her notable appearance on Shark Week and the description of her research, when reading through this section I found myself wondering why this person was important and why she should have a Wikipedia page. You could fix this either by moving a description of her notable achievements to earlier in the summary section and then moving into the biographical stuff, or by creating a new section for the biographical information separate from the initial summary. You also might want to add a link to her father's page, as he seems like a notable figure. Klm10 (talk) 23:41, 1 December 2020 (UTC)

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Hi! I agree, this is a really well-researched article. I'm impressed with how many wikilinks you've added. I do think it would be good to include her notable achievements first, as I believe a lot of Wikipedia articles do that. It's the reason we use wiki when we google people, I think. Also, if possible maybe include her thesis as a source, since you mention it? I'd assume it's published somewhere so it might be nice to have cited in the article. Otherwise, a really good article!--EnviroIsCool (talk) 17:44, 3 December 2020 (UTC)