User talk:Abigaicatherine/sandbox

Hello fellow Wikipedia commentators and peer editors!

This draft is a current combination of the research I have done as well as the original text from the first "ethical living" page. The citations that are blue and referenced are my own, however, the one's in black writing are the ones from the previous article which I will need to check and cite. I would appreciate your feedback! Thanks!

Abbey

Abigaicatherine (talk) 03:46, 21 November 2017 (UTC)

Peer Review- Noah Westerfield
I think you did a great job doing research and finding relevant information to contribute to ethical living.In the 6th contribution, your critical examination of the importance of changing individual daily habits vs the importance of a large scale change in large organizations and multinational corporations shows a balanced perspective with the wikipedia section. I think it is very appealing and a great read! Although it is a nice read, there are multiple grammatical errors and some of the information is smushed together so I would try to mix the contributions so it is a little easier to read for the average joe. Overall I enjoyed your contribution, great job! — Preceding unsigned comment added by Noahwest85 (talk • contribs) 18:49, 21 November 2017 (UTC)

Peer Review - Amjad Hanifah
A great break down of the concept with plenty of details! The way it looks is a bit disorganized; if information is presented in smaller subsections, the article would be easily navigated. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Amjad.hanifah (talk • contribs) 07:14, 22 November 2017 (UTC)

Ethical Living Review:
Great lead paragraph, it presents ethical living in an interesting and simplistic way.

I recommend describe how ethical living manifests in the practices of “consumerism, sustainability, environmentalism, wildlife and animal movement” more in detail.

Consider addressing why ethical living has not evolved into an organized social movement.

The detailed discussion of what living ethically looks like in the second paragraph contributes to the overall clarity of the article. Explain how the lifestyle changes listed out in the paragraph are examples of ethical living practices. For example, what ethics or moral values are taken into consideration when making the daily decision to switch off the lights when you are not in the room?

The last paragraph lacks a smooth transition and it is not clear why Briton is relevant.

Expand on the topic of the environmental movement’s beliefs about ethical living, and the argument for the involvement of Big Business. This could be an individual body paragraph with a bolded header.

The first reference link leads to a book on ethics and feminism, from the information currently presented in the article, it does not seem as through feminism is relevant. Perhaps add a body paragraph that discusses the connection of feminism to ethical living.

Fei Wade (talk) 01:00, 23 November 2017 (UTC)