User talk:Abigail Payne/sandbox

Abigail, Your source had to be cited in the article. I cited the source for you so no you can make minor corrections or add minor details and submit your product. Your input is very relevant to the article as a whole but maybe you could articulate a little bit more on what kinds of crimes the mobs are fighting against and then committing. The article has very close similarities to what is going on all across our country right now with all of the protests against Donald Trump. Many of the protesters are doing so for fear of being discriminated against by discriminating against those who did not vote the same way. Your article is very well written but I think that just a little more would help strengthen it.

Guatemala is ranked the 25th most violent country in the world and Guatemalan police have a reputation for being non-responsive to the high crime rates. The lack of security within the government is what encouraged the start of mobs taking "justice" into their own hands. Unfortunately, a lot of the crime associated with these mobs is just as bad as the crime they claim they are attempting to prevent. Most of the locals keep quiet for fear of being targeted by these groups themselves, and many of the people participating in the violence are forced to do so.

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I noticed that, while you did cite your source, you did not cite individual facts. Are each of the facts listed from the same source? By citing individual claims, you are showing exactly where you found this knowledge. Perhaps, if you have found all of this information, it would be helpful to dig in on research and pull up similar findings from diversified sources. This way you are not leaning too heavily on one source of information, showing that others have come to the same conclusion as the author of the piece you have cited.

I would also like to note that, while very well written, your piece has certain phrases that perhaps might not be written in the ideal tone. One example is that of the word justice within a set of quotes. When reading this I see this as an attempt to qualify what this group calls justice as less than just. A better strategy might be to identify the groups actions as a form of vigilantism, as it gets the same message across without affecting your academic tone. Caleavy (talk) 14:33, 16 November 2016 (UTC)

Well-written, though I was expecting something more on specific violence against women, since the title is "Violence Against Women in Guatemala." How does it differ, or does it, from the violence in general? Did I miss something, perhaps this is an introduction and your group goes into more detail in other sections (I did not see a title for your section)? I did a quick search of the ASU library and the first article is "Crimes Without Punishment: Violence Against Women in Guatemala."

DTavoian53DTavoian53 (talk) 22:01, 17 November 2016 (UTC)