User talk:Abraham Martei Martey/sandbox

Kim's Peer Review
Hi Abraham,

Dan mentions a lot of key points like making sure you have enough sources.

For your Area article, since you write about Canada under the Qualification section, you might consider what is being done within community education in the US/attitudes about it in the US. Moreover, I think the Qualification section discusses more about what qualifies teachers/programs to participate in community education rather than which instances of its implementations make it a qualified resource. However, this should deter you from including the piece about Canada. Instead you should elaborate on how exactly community education is valuable.

For your second contribution to the Area article, I think you should add more information. The sentence that you have right now, while excellent at capsulating everything, should have more background information as well. A new subsection should not stand alone with 1 sentence. I would change the grammar of your sentence as well to use a colon rather than semicolon! Perhaps you can add more on how and what parents can support financially and materially, how to foster communication between parents and schools, etc.

Overall, good job of contributing useful information to these already information-heavy pages and finding a hole in which you can inject yourself in! Kimdo1 (talk) 01:36, 20 March 2018 (UTC)

Neha's Workshop Feedback for Community Engagement article
For the Parental participation: The first sentence is a run-on - try to break it down into two sentences. First paragraph is a bit wordy - focus on succinctness, less is more :)

great job so far!