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Articles I'm editing
Flower_girl -more concise section headings -grammer mistake in the third sentence under the Elizabethan Era -make sure the tenses are consistent under the Victorian Era -sentence structure improvement under the Royal Influences
 * Approved. Another student from this course chose the same article, so make sure to use the article talk page to explain your changes and communicate with others if necessary. Josef Horáček (talk) 19:31, 7 February 2015 (UTC)

Adding references

 * Your sources for Democratic Russia look good. You don't need to work on The Big Dipper. Only one article is enough. Josef Horáček (talk) 14:03, 16 February 2015 (UTC)

Food craving http://eds.a.ebscohost.com.libezp.lib.lsu.edu/eds/detail/detail?vid=24&sid=1a49c794-9c51-49d5-b6af-eb983873aae5%40sessionmgr4005&hid=4205&bdata=JnNpdGU9ZWRzLWxpdmUmc2NvcGU9c2l0ZQ%3d%3d#db=egh&AN=60294593 — Preceding unsigned comment added by Absspyridon (talk • contribs) 02:32, 20 February 2015 (UTC) http://eds.a.ebscohost.com.libezp.lib.lsu.edu/eds/detail/detail?vid=35&sid=1a49c794-9c51-49d5-b6af-eb983873aae5%40sessionmgr4005&hid=4205&bdata=JnNpdGU9ZWRzLWxpdmUmc2NvcGU9c2l0ZQ%3d%3d#db=boh&AN=BACD201200281140 — Preceding unsigned comment added by Absspyridon (talk • contribs) 02:49, 20 February 2015 (UTC) http://eds.a.ebscohost.com.libezp.lib.lsu.edu/eds/detail/detail?vid=47&sid=1a49c794-9c51-49d5-b6af-eb983873aae5%40sessionmgr4005&hid=4205&bdata=JnNpdGU9ZWRzLWxpdmUmc2NvcGU9c2l0ZQ%3d%3d#db=psyh&AN=2012-24521-000 — Preceding unsigned comment added by Absspyridon (talk • contribs) 03:10, 20 February 2015 (UTC)
 * I see you chose a different article. Good job. Josef Horáček (talk) 06:46, 2 March 2015 (UTC)

Article that needs a new lead
Women's basketball I find the existing ideas of the current lead to be good, however, the sentence structure does not flow very well. I also feel there should be information in the lead about women's basketball in other parts of the world besides the United States. Finally, I think the whole article would read better if the order of some of the subtropics were placed in a different order.

Interior design education I find this articles information to be placed in a good order. I also feel the information in this article is all relevant to the topic. I think the lead should include an overview of the main subtopics like the education you can receive, and also the distinction between interior design and architecture.

Interior design education

Interior design education is offered in different parts of the world; however, the application requirements for acceptance vary upon countries and schools. This field offers many alternatives for becoming certified (cite 1). Something people will take away from education in interior design is, crucial skills that will better their decision-making in all aspects of the space. The interior design field offers multiple job opportunities and chances of promotions. It is important to point out some schools will offer education in interior Architecture and/or interior design, which are not the same fields of study but do overlap in some ways (cite 2).

cite 1 cite 2
 * The lead is a good start and the references definitely help, but you need to revise for style. 1. In the first sentence, replace "upon" with "among." 2. The third sentence needs to be completely reworded. Start by figuring out what interior design actually teaches, and then say it simply. 3. Job opportunities - such as? 4. Avoid using "and/or." Here, just use "and." 5. "Architecture" is lower case. Josef Horáček (talk) 06:52, 2 March 2015 (UTC)