User talk:Abz123m/sandbox

Here are some feedbacks, good luck!


 * The introduction has a good transition, but make sure to explain the curriculum system (2-6-3-3-3) and other types of structures so that the readers will understand more about the reading.
 * The ‘History’ subheading will be better if you explain the education history in Kenya throughout the years generally, then you focus on explaining the curriculum history. Also, the reason for the curriculum replacement should be included (like the evaluation or the reason why it is changed).
 * In the ‘Structure and System’ subheading, you can explain more about the routes the students will take in the beginning of grade 10, by stating the subjects and maybe the teaching styles applied in those routes will help the readers understand more. The explanation can be placed after (below) the stated routes.
 * Maybe you can also add other subheadings that will discuss about the real condition in Kenya, how many students chose certain routes for grade 10, and the track they choose after graduating high school.
 * Overall, the whole article is good. Make sure to pay attention towards the way you’re writing it, like the amount of sentences in a paragraph, and writing in paragraph instead of points if not necessary. Also, if you write more information about the issue that will be discussed later in the article inside the introduction part will be very helpful to the readers.

Plan to update my article using peer review:

1. I might add slightly more description of the curriculum systems in my intro to give the reader more of a base understanding before the rest of the article

2. I will try and research and find out the reasoning behind the curriculum changes and add that into my history section.

3. I will add explanation about the 3 routes of further education just to clarify to the reader what these are

4. I won't be adding another subheading about the real condition as I think it will take my article off on too much of a tangent. My article is just outlining what the curriculum actually is.

5. I will re-read my intro to double check that most things i talk about throughout the essay are included in the introduction Abz123m (talk) 16:23, 7 December 2021 (UTC)