User talk:Aciccia93

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Jdb337 Peer Edit Revisions to Aciccia93's Edits to A Wrinkle in Time Article: •	Does the writer employ concise, plain language? Are any sentences awkward or lengthy? Are there any weasel words? What revisions or proofreading to individual sentences would you recommend? o	Avoid the word “wrestles” since it is a cliché. o	Try to paraphrase when possible to avoid quotes. o	The sentence that starts with “The novel’s scientific and religious undertones…” should include a signal phrase, so the reader knows this is not your own research. o	Add another signal phrase for the sentence “The novel is highly spiritualized…” o	Confusing part of the sentence “Furthermore, throughout the children’s journey…” because the phrase “almost always” is thrown in there. o	Opinion phrase/ “peacock” word: “…There remains doubt to whether the novel truly can be…” o	Check grammar regarding commas. o	Remove the phrase “In fact” •	Does each sentence convey a factual claim? Is each sentence cited? One citation per statement is the minimum expectation. No original research should be included. o	Most of the phrases are cited. o	Add more signal phrases when the citations are not applied. o	Seems like there is some original research when there are opinions thrown in. o	I made note of where I thought another reader could see the phrase as “opinionated.” •	Does each sentence attribute viewpoints to the people who hold them/the source? Does the writer need to add signal phrases? o	See comments above regarding signal phrases. •	If writer has composed an entire paragraph, does it flow logically? Is anything unclear to you? o	The paragraphs do flow logically. o	Helps to see how it fits into the article. •	Do you need more information or clarifications to understand the drafted materials? o	Some of the sentences could use some clarification since similar words are constantly used. o	When possible explain more about what is trying to be said. •	If the drafted materials is to be included in the lead-in section, review relevant Wikipedia guidelines. o	Does provide more of a summary of the upcoming topics in the article. o	Introduce information regarding religion and the controversy it proposes. o	Make sure to remove quotes and try to paraphrase. Jdb337 (talk) 18:38, 27 November 2018 (UTC)Jdb337