User talk:Aclement08684/sandbox

This article about greenwashing lists the 'seven sins' or the offenses committed by products that claim to be environmentally friendly or green. The article does a good job of explaining the sins in a comprehensive and understandable way. However, there are several issues with the article:

1) There is already a Wikipedia article on greenwashing and the sins are listed there. So it isn't clear as to what the author's aim of listing them here is. Does the author want to expand the published article? If so, does the author only want to focus on the seven sins? If not, then is the author trying to create a new article that is solely focused on the seven sins? If it's the latter, then we need to ask what the unique thing about this article is and what new ideas the author wants to contribute that audiences won't obtain from the greenwashing article itself.

2) The second problem is with the formatting of the article since it does not follow the Wikipedia guidelines. It would be advisable to add different sections or subsections for each sin. There is also a lot of potential to add wiki links in the article that would greatly improve the standard of this article. So adding a wiki link for CFCs or DDts would be beneficial.

3) Citation is extremely important when publishing a Wikipedia article. However, there are is no reference to any sources. Therefore, it becomes difficult to discern whether the information provided comes from one or multiple sources, or whether it is a mere reflection of the seven sins mentioned in the greenwashing article.

4) Since Wikipedia serves as an informative platform for a huge audience, the terminology and the tone needs to be more formal. So for example writing 'SIN 1: SIN OF HIDDEN TRADE OFFS The Sin of Hidden Trade' seems redundant. Also instead of directly targeting the audience by saying something like 'This can be seen in the Automobile Industry when you see ads for an Eco Friendly SUV', it would be better to say 'this is evident in the advertisements promoting the automobile industry for Eco friendly Sport Utility Vehicles (SUVs).

Purplepsych (talk) 22:16, 9 November 2014 (UTC)